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Blackstar - insane rambelings?

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Postby armadillo » Wed Jul 21, 2004 2:53 am

Always fancied being a bit of a writter. Always had the problem of being a bit crap at writting. Never mind. I thought i'd get other peoples opinion on it so i posted it here for the other 2 people who visit this forum to look at [img]smile.gif[/img] Here's what i've wrote so far

Babylon 5: Darkstar

The dawning of the third age has just begun. A select few have changed course of billions of lives. The repercussions of their actions are still rippling across the universe. These combined with the remnants of the second age make these dangerous times especially for the humans. The future is unknown, and a new set of players are about to make their mark on the universe.

Again a select few will decide the fate of billions….


Baptism of Fire

Chapter 1

Onboard the Omega class destroyer Persephone

Confusion…. Someone calling his name… He runs toward the source of the noise… Intense pain… He drops the objects… A women screaming… His mother… Heat and debris hitting him from the left… Gunfire… the screaming stops… bodies… his mother’s body… Confusion… Danger in close proximity… He picks up the Object and thrusts it at the danger… A glimmer catches his eye… He turns… Something is bought down on him darkness…

Beep, beep, beep, the annoying noise ripped him from the darkness. He tried to remember what happened, but the blurred images just faded away into nothingness as his consciousness kicked into gear. He turned his head, to find the engineer of his rude awaking. His annoyance and thoughts of dreams were forgotten as the gold priority message flashed on his screen. Quickly locating his communicator he slipped it on to his hand and activated it.

“Champion”,
“You’d better see this”, Captain Rison spoke with an urgency he’d never heard before. He heard the monitor beep and a mash of colours started to flow over the screen as a voice played.
“This is capt’1*!^&*%£ of th#*”[?ance cruiser to any cr*&^*^%an hear me. We are und()£”%ck by a vessel of u^$£own ori£”n and r*&$”re immediate assssss().” Another voice interrupted “%%&ey’re locking on”
“Ca&%$jump?”
“Nega(“£e sir, I’m reading a huge }!£*c spi!”*”
“*ll crew brace }1*($ impact. All alli*+*2”£ft watch out for”

A brief sound of metal ripping apart ended the transmission. The captain’s voice came from the speaker leaving the weird mixture of colours “That’s all we have. The message came from theta system where parts of the 45th are running battle manoeuvres. We’ll be there in 47 minutes.” The abrupt message cut off, bringing back the usual ‘what service do you require?’ Picture to the screen. “Bollocks”, he said to himself as he headed towards his pants. A mixture of excitement and unease filled him, as he quickly got ready. This could be his first taste of combat if it came to a firefight. He had a quick glance at the mirror to make sure he wasn’t too untidy, the image in the mirror called back a flicker of his forgotten dream, a flash of fire. The moment came and went in a blink of an eye, leaving him staring at his own reflection. He quickly turned and started heading towards the bridge, his unease soon giving way to thoughts of what the future might bring…

Chapter 2

Rison slowly looked round the bridge, checking each station, checking that all the crew was doing their job. Subconsciously he was just looking for something to do; he was ready for action and was looking for an excuse to vent his trepidation. He got it as Champion entered. “Ahh Commander, I’m glad you could join us”, not without a hint of sarcasm.
“Sir” Champion curtly replied, as he walked into position.
“Would you please bring the commander up to date Mr Luzzi”
“Aye Sir. Around 19:43 Earth Standard Time we received a badly distorted message from the Theta system. There was enough there to recognise it as a distress call from an EA ship so we started toward the origin of the call at best speed. The ships Adonis, Nemesis, Scylla, and Hector, are already on scene and are waiting for us.”
“Thank you lieutenant”, said the captain. “Any thoughts Commander?”
“Any details about the attack yet?”
“Not, communications have been kept to a minimum. What we do know is somebody took down an Omega and a Nova class destroyer in under 20 seconds”
“That’s a lot of firepower, who do we thinks behind it?”
“There’s only on five powers that have that capability Centauri, Narn, Minbari, vree, and the Drakh”
“Don’t forget the ISA” butted in champion
“They wouldn’t do anything like this” shot back slightly riled Rison
“Maybe not, but they have the capability”
“Hmm” captain Rison replied deciding to avoid any confrontation
The bridge quieted down to the normal low humming, though the tension was palpable. The atmosphere broke as Champion picked up the conversation;
“All the empires are on the far side of EA space and have no reason to attack, and it would be out of character for the Drakh to pick a heavily armed purely military target”
“Which means?”
“It’s someone new”
“We’ve been using Theta since before the dilgar war and it’s a secure system. We would have noticed an alien civilisation before now.”
“The Drakh go for raiding easy targets, picking off the weak. The only other group to be able to escape our attention and get to that system is the ISA. So it’s either the ISA or someone new. Those are the only logical possibilities unless we’ve started blowing up our own ships!”
“What possible reason do the ISA have for flying half way though Earth space and attacking those two ships?”
“I’m not saying they did, I’m only pointing out the possibilities”
“Champion for the ISA to be a possibility they’d have to have a reason. What could that possibly be” said the captain getting angrier.
“I dunno they tend to make up their crusades as they go. You’d be better off asking Mr Corea”
“I want you to check the fighter launch systems, now Mr Champion” Captain said his nostrils flaring.
“Sir” Champion said as he left the bridge with a slight grin.
Lieutenant Luzzi Concentrated on his screen not wanting to look up. Captain Rison had many fine qualities, but anger management wasn’t one of them. He often took it out on the people around him and Luzzi didn’t want to be himself. An icon flashed up indicating he had a message from Tanya Taillon on the security console. He opened it up. “Who’s Mr Corea?” he quickly wrote back “a mind reader”. A moment later he heard a small laugh. “Anything funny Miss Tanya” said the Captain glaring. “No sir” Tanya quickly replied. “Good” the captain said sitting back in his chair. The Spat ended there, but the atmosphere continued for long time after wards.


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